We've been writing narratives and this is one written by Liam. Hope you enjoy it.
Uh-Oh! I Hear Another Excuse Coming!
Dear Mrs Plumm
My homework book is a bit messy today but this is why.
On Monday two big lions ran at me Mrs P. I tried to run away but they were gaining on me and caught me. That’s why my books all screwed up.
On Tuesday my bedroom window was left open and two monkeys smelt my squashed banana sandwich all over it, and so they chewed at it until there was nothing left.
On Wednesday Papa Smurf took my book to show the Smurfs what a homework book looks like. I fought him for my book for a whole hour because I knew you’d be angry. He might be old but he sure is strong Mrs P! It’s not a lie Mrs.
On Thursday while I was crossing the bridge to get to the library an ugly old troll popped up from out of nowhere and pushed me off the bridge. My homework was in my school bag and that floated away downstream. I searched for ages trying to find it, but sorry no luck! You know what, I think that troll looked just like Te Ao!
On Friday morning I rode my bike to school. I had my homework sheet rolled up in my pocket when a boogey monster sprang out from behind the bushes. He pushed me off my bike and stole my homework book. I chased him Mrs P but he was way too fast for me. Honest!
So Mrs P I am very very sorry but I promise I will hand it in finished and much neater next week.
Truthfully,
Johnnie Smeegle
Loved the descriptive writing. I made me think and it made me smile too, so I enjoyed that humor that was in it. That's especially important on days like Friday. Thank you for feedback on our video from last year (Melville Survivor: Episode Five; Scramble) the kids did enjoy it at the time and there was a really big challenge from our students to film it, but overall I think that they did a really good job so we were happy about that.
ReplyDeleteWe're glad you liked our stories. We had fun writing them too. The class thought up some really far out excuses that made us all laugh. Whaea K enjoyed reading our stories and our wild imaginative minds.
DeleteThanks for sharing your comments Melville. We enjoy watching your videos and reading your comments. Makes us work harder. You guys do some really cool stuff and its good to see it on your blog.
ReplyDeleteI think that is really funny when you said that papa smurf stole your homework and the finniest thing about it is when the monster stole it and you were trying to catch the monster but it was way to fast for you. I would give this book a 10 out of 10 because it really interested me and honestly when I read it I was laughing in my head.
ReplyDeleteThanks for the comment Stella and Melville Intermediate. We liked that you liked reading our stories. We haven't posted for awhile so we we're sorry if we haven't replied earlier.
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